Thanks, Jezzi and femur. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
You're quite right about the illustrations, femur. The watermarks were an experiment, so I just chose photos that I liked. It's tough (as we all know) to find pics that fit well with a given story. As for the other images... I admit it, I've just been cramming in as many of them as I can because it's fun. (We won't delve into the no doubt fascinating psychological reasons of why
I think those (altered) images probably work better for short captions or vignettes, where the image is the direct focus of the text and there are only one or two pictures present. I may stop trying to illustrate longer stories, since there the emphasis is on the text---and that's where my real interests lie anyway. It has been fun to try to string together a story based on a set of pictures, but I think I've taken it about as far as it can go. After all, I'm pretty much stuck with only that one expression!
the ending could have been expanded
I do respect your opinion, but we'll have to agree to disagree here. However, it does allow me to get on my soapbox and discuss my favorite topic: writing.
A big problem with many (perhaps most) TG stories I've seen is that the author didn't begin or end the story in the right place. Most stories start too soon, detailing too much of the hero's background or daily life before getting into the meat of the plot, and they usually overshoot the climax of the action by providing too much information about what comes later. You might be able to get away with that in a character-driven literary story, but not in a plot-driven genre story---which is what most TG stories are. The story should begin by quickly putting the hero into a situation that raises some big question in the reader's mind (e.g., will he save the world, become a woman, etc) and it should end very soon after that question has been answered. I have a very simple rule of thumb: if I find it boring, then I cut it out. For this story, I'm just not interested in what happens to Jenna after she puts on the Skin. The climax occurs when she puts it on and escapes her captors; the short afterward is just there to tidy up loose ends and provide an echo of the beginning of the story.
That's it, lecture over. :-)